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The boy stood in the forest just on the outside of his small village of Lark, his tattered robes swaying in the wind. a bush to his left shivered catching the boy's attention. He slowly approaches the bush with a quizzical look. He flips his blonde hair out of his eyes, and upon hearing a startling poof* noise behind him, turning abrubtly. An old man looks down on the child as if sizing him up. The old man named Dentrothar laughs and asks

          "What in the world are you doing out here, Jerich?"

          "Practicing, Master. I am struggling quite a lot with this shield spell."

The old man smiles, mercifully and tells Jerich the in cantation again. The fifteen year old boy should be able to cast such a simple spell, especially with his staff and tome.

         "Alterior Protenta boy, try it again"

Jerich holds the six foot long staff out in front of him at a slight angle and recites the incantation. Some small shards appear around the boy for a moment but no more. The young wizard frowns and begins to kick a leaf, and then resuming to catch it on fire, but quickly putting it out with a large drop of water.

This is a story I've been working on..how is it so far? I made this thread to to get some ideas. I will play the part of Jerich,and it's up to you who he meets and stuff. I'll throw your character's name into my story and the entire thing will soon unfold. This is chapter one by the way.

any idead to improve it or a genral direction for the rest of the story?